Whispers of the Desert 8

A New Job

Abraham’s Bakery in Old Jerusalem (City of Isaiah)

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After two years had passed, Amir’s father released him from farming the land and allowed him to work in the bakery.

Jacob consulted with Rachel about Amir taking a more prominent role in the bakery. He was getting old and needed to pass his trade knowledge to his son. “Dear, I’ve been thinking of bringing Amir in from the fields and letting him learn the baking trade.”

“I’m surprised you waited this long,” she said.

“To be honest, I’m worried about the threat a few years ago from the Red Scorpion Judge.” 

“He was just a fresh young man then. He no longer looks like he did before.”

“Ah, yes. I’m so proud of him. He has grown tall and strong as a Byzantine lion. But he is still a quiet and respectful man. He’s nothing like those gang members running through the city fighting and robbing everyone in the name of Allah.”

“It worries me he will not fight for his property and inheritance should they target us.”

“I worry he will not fight for his life.” Jacob turned away from Rachel to return to his ovens. 

Jacob went back to work with slumped shoulders and bowed head. He looked like he carried the world on his shoulders. Jacob and Amir were good men, and Rachel loved them. That someone lay in wait to harm them filled her with anger.

Rachel muttered as she returned to the kitchen to mix more dough for Jacob to bake. “These brigands of Satan will not harm them if I am near.” 

Amir was ecstatic when his parents shared their decision with him. He would gladly trade his nose full of sand from the fields for the hot ovens and the smell of fresh baked bread. Jacob and Rachel watched in amusement as Amir made all kinds of promises about being an excellent baker like his father.

“…And your mother?” Rachel reminded her son with a hug. Jacob’s stooped stature straightened as the dark wrinkles on his face disappeared behind a broad smile.

For another year, Amir shadowed his father through all the tasks of taking raw grain and turning it into fresh bread, which brought happiness and sustenance to the neighborhood. He showed a particular skill at engaging humbly with his clients. Everyone was eager to visit with him. Bread and conversation became an uplifting part of the neighborhood scene.

The young Baker’s son was always quick to ask the elders about their memories of the old days. He sought their wisdom and became known as a respectful young man with remarkable intelligence. His love of debate with his peers in scripture and his calm manner when critiqued by his schoolteacher earned him respect in the Old City of Isaiah. 

Abraham’s bakery became popular for buying bread, sitting, and telling stories. Amir used a sleight of hand to take a poor woman’s money and put it back in her bag with a fresh round of hard-crust bread. When the parents sent children to buy bread, he looked at their clothing and, finding them poor, took only half the money owed and put the rest in the package. Rachel saw what her son did, but she never mentioned that she was aware of his charity. They were making three times the money they did a year ago. Allah had blessed them because her son was growing to be a pious man.

37 responses to “Whispers of the Desert 8”

  1. How many AI image gaffs can you spot?

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  2. Well, Bakary’s Bakery stands out.

    I didn’t know the City of Isaiah was Old Jerusalem.

    Amir certainly has an interesting city to learn his trade in.

    I wonder if Hamas are descended from the Red Scorpions 🦂.

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    1. Silly AI can’t spell. We already knew that having suffered from the auto-incorrect spell checker on our not so smart phones. Yes, isn’t that a bit of history. Isaiah gave his fellow Jews the tomato bootie around 800 B.C.E in the old city of Jerusalem, which, for the most part, is still there and still filled with iniquity. I made up the Red Scorpions because it sounded a bit evil. Red is the color of Satan and the Pope’s velvet slippers. Coincidence? Maybe not.

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      1. Definitely not, Daniel. 😂

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  3. These are mere story outlines, like point of reference touchstones, right? There’s some grand masterwork in the background we don’t get to see?

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    1. Yes, You got it Phil. I’m posting only the first cuts while I’m doing the heavy lifting offline. I have been incorporating your lessons in the parts already published, but for now, we get the outlined Reader’s Digest version. The grand scheme was this would be a sort of experiment online but the real deal takes place offline. If the general storyline seems good, the actual novel might also be better. Of course, as a seasoned research and development guy, I’m used to the project exploding on the launch pad so the plans are always in pencil so it can be easily erased.

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      1. Long on narrator short on character. Remember – the easy way is the stand up comedian, Garrison Keillor way. The engaging way is to have people tell their stories. I could use a lot less you and a lot more Amir et al. No offense🤣Like, I don’t wanna hear about their discussions, I wanna hear their discussions. I tend to trust characters a lot more than I trust narrators. Again, no offense😎

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        1. No offense taken. All excellent points well taken. I was sure the back ground chit chat would be an annoyance. This is how I actually get to a story. I tell it, ask the characters to take it from there. They read the script and do their parts well. Once we get the director out of the scene it goes pretty well. I’m focusing more in the later parts of letting the characters do most of the work. I’m also revising the chapters we have already discussed. I should have never read John Milton’s Paradise Lost or Danté’s Divine Comedy as a kid. It totally ruined me. My grandmother had her grandfather’s first print in America of Shakespeare’s complete works. Naturally, I wanted to read it but Shakespeare frightened me away from reading for a very long time. I couldn’t understand any two words in the entire collection. Writing and thinking while I write is now all about getting Milton, Danté, and Shakespeare out of my skull so I can write two words together other’s can understand. 😵‍💫💫 It’s a process and if there is ever a return to sanity, it should go a lot easier.

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          1. Sometimes you have take literature as form, like geometry and forget style and algebra. The piano and the guitar are both geometry, so pick a bazinglezoid that will play a nice melody and get you from the root to the story and show you where to land.

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  4. Your story has taken a drastic turn. Amir was lusting and reading the holy book and now he’s in the bakery kneading dough. 🤗

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    1. LOL! Life is chaotic, No? This and other chapters are not fully fleshed out and as usual are only first cuts. All the hard work is behind the scenes after I publish the outlines and get feedback. A little peek, Amir is going to have to find a way to manage two love interests. One has nothing but his best interest, the other is leading him to his death. Should be interesting to see which way he goes. I’m like Amir. If I have a choice between threshing grain in 120 degree heat or slinging dough, I’m choosing the dough. His heat tolerance will be very helpful in the future. 😉

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      1. Amir is making all the right moves. Very clever , I can’t wait to see what is ahead for him.

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        1. If I do this right, we should be on the edge of our seats with our hands over our eyes. 🫣. If not, it will be another WTF moment for all of us. 😲. Poor Amir, he is in for a real ride. David should warn him about such behaviors.

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          1. No warnings… it’s full out because if anyone can have us on the edge of our seat it’s you! I’m excited about this story Dan.

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            1. I so appreciate your encouragement. I will caution, no giant lizards in this story but we do have an assortment of nefarious characters and lovely ladies.

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              1. The complete package but I will miss the giant lizards. 🦎

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                1. Lizards always seem so wise and calm until it’s time to skeedaddle and then those rascals are lightning fast. 🦎⚡️

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                  1. They like fine jewelry, a bauble or two will calm them down 💎

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                    1. Waaaa haaaaa haaaaa! That is great information. I never knew. Jewelry takes up much less space than a half dozen honey buns.

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                    2. They aren’t getting the honey buns… full stop. 🤗

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                    3. That’s right. I’m tired of throwing perfectly good honey buns at the wildlife and they never return the favor. At least not yet. As an aside, Whispers of the Desert 9 is up and guess who’s back in Amir’s life after a long hiatus?

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  5. What a great opportunity for Amir to grow into his own and shows charity to people who need it.

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    1. Thank you M. I think we should all follow Amir’s example.

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      1. Those are tall steps to live by.

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        1. You are right. Never mind, I’m going back to sleep. I’ll see what’s going down when I wake up. Ole Rip Van Winkle fan here. 😴

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          1. I’m headed to a nap was well.

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            1. Happy Dreams!

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        2. The New York Times sent Elmore Leonard The Girl With The Dragon Tattoo. Roughly 550 pages. He quit at page 100 waiting for something to happen. After that he quit accepting anything longer than 300 pages and kept his fingers crossed.

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          1. Maybe I should stick to short stories and novellas with the action up front and mayhem to follow. 🤔

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  6. Still following along with baited breath.

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    1. LOL! I’m experimenting with building suspense through boredom. I have to be careful or I may get the boot 🥾 📖. We will soon experience sex, drugs, violence, and nefariousness to shake things up a little.

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      1. Now THAT’s what I’m talkin’ ’bout Willis!

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        1. Things heat up quickly after a few sleepy chapters. Amir finally goes to college and you know what happens in college. All men with holy plans fall to the Dark Knight’s evil sister of oral delights. Yep, Amir will surely fall into the Red Scorpion’s martyr recruitment thirst trap.

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  7. I’m gradually catching up. You’re making the episodes a comfortable length for a blog serial. I know from experience what a challenge that part alone can be. The bakery setting in this one really draws me to the characters. Hugs.

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    1. Thank you Teagan. I’ve been posting an unedited readers digest version of the story and working behind the scenes to edit and refine the story based on suggestions I receive.

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